Last Day

Last day

H/I “Second Chance” Draft?
Essays must include my comments

H/I bonus points.

MLADM2KX, round two, the reckoning.

Complete Feedback.

Return of Essays, etc
Starting Thursday, ask Kelley in English Department.

Grades due Thursday, posted online under schedule that day

My schedule
Fall: English 101x2 and Creative Writing.
Winter 102x3: Here's what we're reading.
Spring 70 x2 and Creative Writing, I think

Also, you can ask about anything anytime.
You can say hi to me on campus. Say your name and I'll say mine.
You can say hi to each other.

And now:

Day 25

English 101 Summer 2010 Day 25

Peer review review?

Narrative Rubric Point Spread.

Structure—Hero's Journey Plot Log—Due Monday with Final Draft.

Monday-final draft, plot log and round one of Modern Language Association Death Match 2010 (MLADM2KX).

Tuesday: Revised essays due.

MLADM2KX: Round Two: The Reckoning.

Now, time for your hero's journey, revision work, questions, research

Day 24

English 101 Summer 2010 Day 24

Meet in the lab tomorrow. Work on essays and stories.

Complete peer review.

Peer review review.

Structure—Hero's Journey Plot Log.

Revision tips and techniques. (powerpoint)

Sample essays

Smoke Signals—Kari, Layla

TKAM—Jim, Anna, David

Costs of Textbooks

Here's an article about "open source" text books titled:
$200 textbook v. free. You do the math.

Learn from Leon

Learn from Lindsey and the Tour de Dumb

Oh Lindsey Jacobellis
Uploaded by joshsports10. - Watch more comedy videos and sitcoms.

Another shot at plagiarism

A new article.

Tom and Barack and Harold

Here's an ad aimed at Harold Ford.
Here's this picture.
And then, this ad.

Is this the same "race baiting" as in TKAM?

And then, more recently, as in July, race became a big issue again, briefly.
What is the difference between "reverse" racism and racism?
What can Zebo really do about it?

Finally, here's the president addressing race during the campaign.

Day 22

English 101 Summer 2010 Day 22

Homework: Rough Draft of Your Journey Due Tomorrow. Bring Four copies, please.

TKAM Essays returned.

Notes:

Better job with applying HJ definitions this time.

Still working on this

Better job with topic sentences and summaries.

Still working on weaving in ample evidence.

MLA improved.

I liked the risks of Atticus and Jem as topics.

Clean copies?

On Wednesday, we'll look at successful essays for the first two assignments.

845 avg: 83.4 (Jasmin, Luis, Dora, Jim, Justin, Lisa and Jessica all improved scores)

1030 avg: 84.1 (Julio, Caroline, Sandra, Lloyd and Moya all improved their scores)

Expert Performance Movement.

Rubric for narrative prompt.

Review from Last Wednesday:

Narrative in Creative Non-fiction

1. Characters (186)
   
   1. You become a character
      
   2. Major ones should be round, have more than one attribute, change over time
      
   3. My father was a great guy v. Mosquitos would not bite him (186)
      

1. Consistency, Complexity, (these first two are in tension) Individuality
   

Setting (187)

"If you say in the first chapter that there is a rifle hanging on the wall, in the second or third chapter it absolutely must go off. If it's not going to be fired, it shouldn't be hanging there."

–Anton Chekhov

1. Time & Place (physical environment)
   

For example: Greasy Lake, Death of a Salesman, To Build a Fire, The Storm

New notes:

Dialogue (118)

Short

Vivid

Believable

Tips on Dialogue

In two's: I'm sorry but…

1. The first writer pulls out a piece of paper and begins their dialogue with the words "I'm sorry, but…". They complete the sentence and pass the journal to their partner.
   
2. The partner, after reading the sentence, writes a line (or paragraph) of dialogue which heightens the tension.
   
3. Keep passing the journal back and forth, trying to throw curve balls at one another without delving into the absurd.
   
4. Try not to rely on dialogue tags to reveal how the character is speaking.
   
5. In fact, don't use dialogue tags at all. Rely on your word choice and punctuation.
   

Listen to how people talk to each other

• Most of it is the weather.
  
• He's like a bull in a china shop…
  
• Eating out. Bars. Waiting rooms. Cell phone jerks. At the checkout.
  

More notes on dialogue:

Dialogue is not real speech, but it should sound like it.

• Cut words and phrases that don't move things along
  

Don't use dialogue to provide exposition—keep it to three sentences or less

Break it up with action—remind us they are physical

Vary signal phrases, but keep it simple. Don't use elaborate signal phrases (she expostulated, he interjected)

Avoid stereotypes in dialect, but…

• Huck Finn
  
• To Kill a Mockingbird
  

Don't over use slang/profanity. "Slang goes sour in a short time." --EH

Read a lot. Note good/bad

Punctuate correctly

• Use quotation marks.
  

Start a new paragraph when changing speakers.

Point of View (131)

Tense (132)

Structure—Hero's Journey.

We'll talk about Wednesday or Thursday.

For now, ¼, ½, ¼: Separation, Initiation, Return/Arrival

Exposition: 104

And "in media res"—Great Beginnings 1 and 2; Memorable Endings

Slides on Revision

Don't click if you are easily offended

Who's Afraid of Virginia Woolf?

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=jB4xlYKAVCQ
Slacker


Waking Life--some people think this goes too far and becomes "preachy"


Glenngary Glen Ross


Reservoir Dogs


Pulp Fiction Hamburger Scene


Casablanca Ending



China Town


Aaron Sorkin Talks to Charlie Rose


Clerks Jedi


Ellen Page and Cody Diablo talk about their favorite lines from Juno


Improvised Lines from Spinal Tap (Christopher Guest, also--Best in Show, Waiting for Guffman)

Day 21

English 101 Summer 2010 Day 21

Vonnegut

Narrative in Creative Non-fiction

1. Characters
   
   1. You become a character
      
   2. Major ones should be round, have more than one attribute, change over time
      
   3. My father was a great guy v. Mosquitos would not bite him (186)
      
   4. Five senses
      

Characterization

1. Say
   
2. Think
   
3. Do
   
4. Look like
   
5. What others say
   
6. Their past
   
7. Names
   

1. Scout, Cal, Dill
   
2. Consistency, Complexity, (these first two are in tension) Individuality
   

Exercises:

1. Naming exercise
   
2. Senses/Images
   
3. He/She was the kind of person who... (five telling details).
   
4. How well do you know your characters.
   

Dialogue (187)

Short

Vivid

Believable

Tips on Dialogue

In two's: I'm sorry but…

1. The first writer pulls out a piece of paper and begins their dialogue with the words "I'm sorry, but…". They complete the sentence and pass the journal to their partner.
   
2. The partner, after reading the sentence, writes a line (or paragraph) of dialogue which heightens the tension.
   
3. Keep passing the journal back and forth, trying to throw curve balls at one another without delving into the absurd.
   
4. Try not to rely on dialogue tags to reveal how the character is speaking.
   
5. In fact, don't use dialogue tags at all. Rely on your word choice and punctuation.
   

Movies with great dialogue: Tarantino, Juno, Linklater, Kevin Smith, Coen Brothers, David Mamet, Casablanca, China Town, Aaron Sorkin

Listen to how people talk to each other

• Most of it is the weather.
  
• He's like a bull in a china shop…
  
• Eating out. Bars. Waiting rooms. Cell phone jerks. At the checkout.
  

Right now: Field work

• Hub. (x8)
  
• Deccio. (x3)
  
• Lobby downstairs. (x4)
  
• Lobby upstairs. (x4)
  
• Library (x3)
  
• Outside. (x2)
  

Come back in 15 minutes with dialogue.

Find a line or two.

More notes on dialogue:

Dialogue is not real speech, but it should sound like it.

• Cut words and phrases that don't move things along
  

Don't use dialogue to provide exposition—keep it to three sentences or less

Break it up with action—remind us they are physical

Vary signal phrases, but keep it simple. Don't use elaborate signal phrases (she expostulated, he interjected)

Avoid stereotypes in dialect, but…

• Huck Finn
  
• To Kill a Mockingbird
  

Don't over use slang/profanity. "Slang goes sour in a short time." --EH

Read a lot. Note good/bad

Punctuate correctly

• Use quotation marks?
  

Start a new paragraph when changing speakers.

Setting (187)

"If you say in the first chapter that there is a rifle hanging on the wall, in the second or third chapter it absolutely must go off. If it's not going to be fired, it shouldn't be hanging there."

–Anton Chekhov

1. Time & Place (physical environment)
   
2. TKAM
   

For example: Greasy Lake, Death of a Salesman, To Build a Fire, The Storm, Grapes of Wrath

Exercise:

• Write about the time: (five minutes)
  
  • you watched light settle on the water
    
  • you saw the first smudge of dawn
    
  • you woke before the others
    

    
    

• Write about something from memory that seems lit by a particular kind of light. (from Grapes of Wrath, Steinbeck)
  
• There was this one tree.
  

5 w's

Senses/Imagery

Day 20

English 101 Summer 2010 Day 20

1. Bonus Points last round. (last night?)
   
2. The writing process.
   
   1. Planning
      
      1. Assess the situation.
         
         1. Subject
            
         2. Sources
            
         3. Purpose and audience
            
         4. Length
            
         5. Reviewers and deadlines
            
      2. Exploring ideas
         
         1. Talking and listening.
            
         2. Annotating texts
            
         3. Listing
            
         4. Clustering
            
         5. Freewriting
            
         6. Asking journalist's questions
            
      3. Formulating a tentative thesis
         
      4. Sketching a plan
         
   2. Drafting
      
      1. Introductions and thesis
         
      2. Body
         
      3. Conclusion
         
   3. Revising
      
      1. Global
         
      2. Revising and editing sentences
         
3. Personal Experience
   
   1. Rites of passage? When did you know you were an adult? (or not a child…)
      
   2. Road trips.
      
   3. Vacations.
      
   4. Moves.
      
   5. Hikes.
      
   6. Camps.
      
   7. How did you arrive in Yakima.
      
   8. Illness/injury.
      
   9. Accidents.
      
   10. Addiction.
       
   11. Depression/psychological.
       
   12. Divorce/relationship.
       
   13. Friendships.
       
   14. Moments of sudden growth
       
4. Observation (Second hand experiences)
   
   1. How did your family arrive in Yakima?
      
   2. Grandparents/parents/siblings/relatives/friends.
      
5. Imagination
   
   1. Invent your own hero.
      
   2. Take Scout, Jem, Boo or Dill on a second journey.
      

Exploring ideas

1. Talking and listening.
   
2. Annotating texts
   
3. Listing
   
4. Clustering
   
5. Freewriting
   
6. Asking journalist's questions
   

Narrative in Creative Non-fiction

1. Characters (read 185-187)
   
   1. You become a character
      
   2. Major ones should be round, have more than one attribute, change over time
      
   3. My father was a great guy v. Mosquitos would not bite him (186 and 167)
      
   4. Five senses
      

Characterization

1. Say
   
2. Think
   
3. Do
   
4. Look like
   
5. What others say
   
6. Their past
   
7. Names
   

1. Senses/Images
   
2. He/She was the kind of person who... (five telling details).
   
3. Consistency, Complexity, (these first two are in tension) Individuality
   

Dialogue (187)

1. Short
   
2. Vivid
   
3. Believable
   

Tips on Dialogue

In two's: I'm sorry but…

1. The first writer pulls out a piece of paper and begins their dialogue with the words "I'm sorry, but…". They complete the sentence and pass the journal to their partner.
   
2. The partner, after reading the sentence,writes a line (or paragraph) of dialogue which heightens the tension.
   
3. Keep passing the journal back and forth, trying to throw curve balls at one another without delving into the absurd.
   
4. Try not to rely on dialogue tags to reveal how the character is speaking.
   
5. In fact, don't use dialogue tags at all. Rely on your word choice and punctuation.
   

Movies with great dialogue: Tarantino, Juno, Linklater, Kevin Smith, Coen Brothers, David Mamet, Casablanca, China Town, Aaron Sorkin

Listen to how people talk to each other

• Most of it is the weather.
  
• He's like a bull in a china shop…
  
• Eating out.
  
• Bars.
  
• Waiting rooms.
  
• Cell phone jerks.
  
• At the checkout.
  

More notes on dialogue:

Dialogue is not real speech, but it should sound like it.

• Cut words and phrases that don't move things along
  

Don't use dialogue to provide exposition—keep it to three sentences or less

Break it up with action—remind us they are physical

Vary signal phrases, but keep it simple. Don't use elaborate signal phrases (she expostulated, he interjected)

Avoid stereotypes in dialect, but…

• Huck Finn
  
• To Kill a Mockingbird
  

Don't over use slang/profanity. "Slang goes sour in a short time." --EH

Read a lot. Note good/bad

Punctuate correctly

• Use quotation marks?
  

Start a new paragraph when changing speakers.

Setting (187)

"If you say in the first chapter that there is a rifle hanging on the wall, in the second or third chapter it absolutely must go off. If it's not going to be fired, it shouldn't be hanging there."

–Anton Chekhov

1. Time & Place (physical environment)
   

For example: Greasy Lake, Death of a Salesman, To Build a Fire, The Storm, Grapes of Wrath

Exercises:

5 w's

Senses/Imagery

Point of view

1. First Person
   
   1. Single character's point of view.
      
2. Advantages of First Person
   
   1. maintain naivete or innocence
      
   2. Narrated out loud.
      
   3. Irony of narrator/Humor
      
      1. Also, unreliable/biased narrators
         
   4. Immediacy?
      
   5. Disadvantages
      
      1. Less flexible
         
      2. Can be contrived
         
3. Third person
   
   1. Better for "hot" material.
      
   2. Flexible.
      
   3. Omniscient/Limited (All characters v Single character)
      
   4. Objective/Subjective: (No thoughts or feelings v. Thoughts and Feelings)
      
   5. Disadvantages
      

"Head hopping"=confusion unless handled right

Vonnegut

Day 19

English 101 Summer 2010 Day 19

1. Bonus Points hand in.
   
2. Bonus Points last round.
   
3. Hand in tracking themes worksheet.
   
4. Hand in peer review review.
   
5. Hand in Final Drafts.
   
6. O/R?
   
   1. Y= Read intro and conclusion
      
   2. N= Don't read intro and conclusion
      
   3. Y= +3pts
      
   4. N= +/- O
      
7. TKAM conclusion.
   
8. Final Essay assigned.
   
9. The last day of our quarter is the 10^th.
   
10. The writing process.
    
    1. Planning
       
       1. Assess the situation.
          
          1. Subject
             
          2. Sources
             
          3. Purpose and audience
             
          4. Length
             
          5. Reviewers and deadlines
             
       2. Exploring ideas
          
          1. Talking and listening.
             
          2. Annotating texts
             
          3. Listing
             
          4. Clustering
             
          5. Freewriting
             
          6. Asking journalist's questions
             
       3. Formulating a tentative thesis
          
       4. Sketching a plan
          
    2. Drafting
       
       1. Introductions and thesis
          
       2. Body
          
       3. Conclusion
          
    3. Revising
       
       1. Global
          
       2. Revising and editing sentences
          
11. Personal Experience
    
    1. Rites of passage? When did you know you were an adult? (or not a child…)
       
    2. Road trips.
       
    3. Vacations.
       
    4. Moves.
       
    5. Hikes.
       
    6. Camps.
       
    7. How did you arrive in Yakima.
       
    8. Illness/injury.
       
    9. Accidents.
       
    10. Addiction.
        
    11. Depression/psychological.
        
    12. Divorce/relationship.
        
    13. Friendships.
        
    14. Moments of sudden growth
        
12. Observation (Second hand experiences)
    
    1. How did your family arrive in Yakima?
       
    2. Grandparents/parents/siblings/relatives/friends.
       
13. Imagination
    
    1. Invent your own hero.
       

Take Scout, Jem, Boo or Dill on a second journey.

Atticus as HJ

Here's a powerpoint on the topic.

Editing Tips

1. Sentence openings (esp It/There)
2. Capital letters/end punctuation
3. Signal phrases
4. Spelling—Spell check.
   its/it's
   there/they're/their
   to/too/two
   Proper names: Friedman, for ex.
5. Verbs of Being: am, is, are, was, were, have, has, had, be, being, been
6. Use a ruler
7. Read backwards
8. Read aloud

The Hero's Journey Packet Information

Book with two authors:

The Hero's Journey: A Guide to Literature and Life
Reg Harris and Susan Thompson
Harris Communication
Napa, California
Copyright 2005

Tracking Themes

A visual guide to tracking themes in TKAM

Here's a similar site.

And here's one with loads of links, including to Study Guides such as Cliff Notes etc.

Day 18

English 101 Summer 2010 Day 18

1. Complete peer review
   
2. Peer Review, Review
   
3. Body Paragraphs
   
4. Tracking Themes—page numbers
   
   1. Part One
      
      1. Racial
         
      2. Social Class
         
      3. Gender
         
   2. Part Two
      
      1. Racial
         
      2. Class
         
      3. Gender
         
5. Research
   
   1. Sparknotes.com
      
   2. Amazon.com
      

Time to work on Final Drafts, ask questions

Day 17

Lesson Plan Day 17

Peer Review Day

1. Number the paragraphs on your essay.

2. Write 1-2 sentences on peer review sheets (repeat for all members of the group).

3. Somebody say, I'll go first.

4. Whole group reads the essay silently.

5. Individually, complete peer review sheets.

6. Writer leads discussion of review sheet.

7. Repeat.

Meet tomorrow in the lab.