Last Day

Last day

H/I “Second Chance” Draft?
Essays must include my comments

H/I bonus points.

MLADM2KX, round two, the reckoning.

Complete Feedback.

Return of Essays, etc
Starting Thursday, ask Kelley in English Department.

Grades due Thursday, posted online under schedule that day

My schedule
Fall: English 101x2 and Creative Writing.
Winter 102x3: Here's what we're reading.
Spring 70 x2 and Creative Writing, I think

Also, you can ask about anything anytime.
You can say hi to me on campus. Say your name and I'll say mine.
You can say hi to each other.

And now:

Day 25

English 101 Summer 2010 Day 25

Peer review review?

Narrative Rubric Point Spread.

Structure—Hero's Journey Plot Log—Due Monday with Final Draft.

Monday-final draft, plot log and round one of Modern Language Association Death Match 2010 (MLADM2KX).

Tuesday: Revised essays due.

MLADM2KX: Round Two: The Reckoning.

Now, time for your hero's journey, revision work, questions, research

Day 24

English 101 Summer 2010 Day 24

Meet in the lab tomorrow. Work on essays and stories.

Complete peer review.

Peer review review.

Structure—Hero's Journey Plot Log.

Revision tips and techniques. (powerpoint)

Sample essays

Smoke Signals—Kari, Layla

TKAM—Jim, Anna, David

Costs of Textbooks

Here's an article about "open source" text books titled:
$200 textbook v. free. You do the math.

Learn from Leon

Learn from Lindsey and the Tour de Dumb

Oh Lindsey Jacobellis
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Another shot at plagiarism

A new article.

Tom and Barack and Harold

Here's an ad aimed at Harold Ford.
Here's this picture.
And then, this ad.

Is this the same "race baiting" as in TKAM?

And then, more recently, as in July, race became a big issue again, briefly.
What is the difference between "reverse" racism and racism?
What can Zebo really do about it?

Finally, here's the president addressing race during the campaign.

Day 22

English 101 Summer 2010 Day 22

Homework: Rough Draft of Your Journey Due Tomorrow. Bring Four copies, please.

TKAM Essays returned.

Notes:

Better job with applying HJ definitions this time.

Still working on this

Better job with topic sentences and summaries.

Still working on weaving in ample evidence.

MLA improved.

I liked the risks of Atticus and Jem as topics.

Clean copies?

On Wednesday, we'll look at successful essays for the first two assignments.

845 avg: 83.4 (Jasmin, Luis, Dora, Jim, Justin, Lisa and Jessica all improved scores)

1030 avg: 84.1 (Julio, Caroline, Sandra, Lloyd and Moya all improved their scores)

Expert Performance Movement.

Rubric for narrative prompt.

Review from Last Wednesday:

Narrative in Creative Non-fiction

1. Characters (186)
   
   1. You become a character
      
   2. Major ones should be round, have more than one attribute, change over time
      
   3. My father was a great guy v. Mosquitos would not bite him (186)
      

1. Consistency, Complexity, (these first two are in tension) Individuality
   

Setting (187)

"If you say in the first chapter that there is a rifle hanging on the wall, in the second or third chapter it absolutely must go off. If it's not going to be fired, it shouldn't be hanging there."

–Anton Chekhov

1. Time & Place (physical environment)
   

For example: Greasy Lake, Death of a Salesman, To Build a Fire, The Storm

New notes:

Dialogue (118)

Short

Vivid

Believable

Tips on Dialogue

In two's: I'm sorry but…

1. The first writer pulls out a piece of paper and begins their dialogue with the words "I'm sorry, but…". They complete the sentence and pass the journal to their partner.
   
2. The partner, after reading the sentence, writes a line (or paragraph) of dialogue which heightens the tension.
   
3. Keep passing the journal back and forth, trying to throw curve balls at one another without delving into the absurd.
   
4. Try not to rely on dialogue tags to reveal how the character is speaking.
   
5. In fact, don't use dialogue tags at all. Rely on your word choice and punctuation.
   

Listen to how people talk to each other

• Most of it is the weather.
  
• He's like a bull in a china shop…
  
• Eating out. Bars. Waiting rooms. Cell phone jerks. At the checkout.
  

More notes on dialogue:

Dialogue is not real speech, but it should sound like it.

• Cut words and phrases that don't move things along
  

Don't use dialogue to provide exposition—keep it to three sentences or less

Break it up with action—remind us they are physical

Vary signal phrases, but keep it simple. Don't use elaborate signal phrases (she expostulated, he interjected)

Avoid stereotypes in dialect, but…

• Huck Finn
  
• To Kill a Mockingbird
  

Don't over use slang/profanity. "Slang goes sour in a short time." --EH

Read a lot. Note good/bad

Punctuate correctly

• Use quotation marks.
  

Start a new paragraph when changing speakers.

Point of View (131)

Tense (132)

Structure—Hero's Journey.

We'll talk about Wednesday or Thursday.

For now, ¼, ½, ¼: Separation, Initiation, Return/Arrival

Exposition: 104

And "in media res"—Great Beginnings 1 and 2; Memorable Endings

Slides on Revision